Writing a story with a 'telepathic detective is hard, because anyone who he can't mindread is automatically suspicious. I've come up with a work-around for the killer, but it's a bit of a stretch. Not good. I have to come up with better ways of fooling Ephram (the detective).
I also need to come up with red herrings and a way to twist the ending. I am crap with plot twists! *whine*
I also saw, after reading everything I wrote, how very, very much you must rewrite things after Nanowrimo, if you want them to be really good. This was intellectually obvious to me all along, but today, I really saw it. I need to write the investigation plan for the police, because what I wrote for Nano was not very good, plan-wise. I concentrated on interviewing suspects and forgot things like checking the passenger lists of starships which had departed from the space station around the time of the murder. Stupid. I watched Babylon 5 and Deep Space Nine, so I should have known better than to forget that. Garibaldi and Odo would have whacked me upside the head.
I was pleased that the story moved quickly--I wasn't bored while reading, even though I didn't finish. It kept me entertained. Of course, this may simply have been because I am the author, and it was like a trip down memory lane. But I still enjoyed it and was glad to see that nothing I wrote made me cringe--always a good sign. I do think I need to improve my writing style; I think I need to concentrate more on showing things and letting the reader figure out what's going on, rather than explaining everything and perhaps restating the obvious. I believe I'm going to start another draft of Vendetta that I might store here on LiveJournal; not sure.
One thing I'm going to do is write an outline of the chapters I've written so far and see where I need to go from there. I should also include a subplot. That was going to be the oppressive nature of Ephram's theocratic homeworld government, but I'm no longer as certain of that. Ephram's homeworld Ekati is a lot different now than I envisioned it three years ago and somehow, that changes things. It's no longer a 'white picket fence' kind of world; it's a lot more dangerous and more difficult to live on. I developed in more detail how it came to be settled, and I think the religion might not have taken the path with this new settlement history than it did on the old, placid, Class-M world.
Anyway, this is giving me a lot of food for thought, and I hope to work on it more this evening.